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useless…

from simplysnickers’ prompt… ;)

i saw my future
in a puddle.
never tried slowing down
this aching hassle.
masochistic side’s
making its way.
pushing self- respect
under and out of the game.
the promise of making love
is like that umbrella,
useless..
on the corner side.

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5 Responses to “useless…”

  1. shidi Says:
    May 1, 2008 at 12:17

    A well use of metaphors. Despite I can even write using one, but I’m a fan of it ;)

    As always, feelings are well delivered.

    Two pieces in one day ay, darling? Good. Keep writing :-*

  2. paisley Says:
    May 1, 2008 at 15:50

    thanks for participating in the new prompt… i love variety,, and try to encourage all who will to put up prompts… it causes me to stretch and write about things i ordinarily wouldn’t…..

  3. Linda - Nickers and Ink Says:
    May 1, 2008 at 16:24

    Thanks for participating in the prompt – AND placing SIMPLY SNICKERS on your prompt list!

    “I saw my future in a puddle” What an opening! Lvoe it.

    Blessings,
    Linda

    BROLLY FOLLY, on THE MANE POINT

  4. Ofira Says:
    May 1, 2008 at 23:44

    Very nicely written

  5. Gemma Wiseman Says:
    May 4, 2008 at 13:30

    Clever, hard-hitting metaphorical connections!

    Gemma

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