all dried up…
would you agree with me?
if i tell you
that im not here to
look after you…
nor to clean up the mess
you’ve been showing everyone?
i want something else…
more providence,perhaps?
so I’ll know when
is the right time to let go.
don’t debate…
you’re not good at it,anyway…
when should we execute
that often used “quits” ?
I’m tired…restless
and there you are
with that smirk,
that awful look,
telling me you hate to go.
that we’re meant to be,
but damn it,
you are sucking
my life dry.
September 17, 2008 at 18:47
Bittersweet poem, but heartfelt, too. Great post.
September 17, 2008 at 19:06
oh dear..that dont sound good..
there are plenty other fish in the sea my dear if that one dont work out..
good luck
September 18, 2008 at 04:47
It sure happens…nicely written.
September 18, 2008 at 05:18
Well done! You captured the feeling so well. And I say kick him out!
September 18, 2008 at 05:39
this recalls to my mind an awesome piece i read earlier today on cordie b’s page… here is a link….
http://cordieb.wordpress.com/2008/09/17/the-heaven-hell-rollercoaster-ride/
maybe it will help….
September 18, 2008 at 08:07
Strong emotion, to be certain. Hits to the core. Thank you…
September 19, 2008 at 17:47
Hits hard…
Depth of hell pours forth tirade of words
September 24, 2008 at 19:04
This piece really has a unique use of language. Very interesting.
November 8, 2008 at 01:11
how do u do that, how do u put life of ur emotions into words in such a good way. nicely written.